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Olympic medals won by twelve different countries

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The bar chart gives information about the number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries, namely china, japan, East Germany, Hungary, Australia, Sweden, Italy, Germany, France, the Uk, the soviet union and the USA. Overall, a closer look at the bar chart highlights that the number of the USA occupies the highest in the chart while different countries tend to be fairly similar throughout the period shown. Look at the bar chart in more detail, the USA has won a total of 2300 Olympic medals, including 900 gold medals, 800 silver medals, and 600 bronde medals. The second on the medals chart is the Soviet Union with 1000 Olympic medals, while this country gold medals won higher than silver and bronze medals.
The bar
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gives information about the number of Olympic
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won by twelve
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china
, japan, East Germany, Hungary, Australia, Sweden, Italy, Germany, France, the
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and the USA.

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, a closer look at the bar
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highlights that the number of the USA occupies the highest in the
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while
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countries tend to be
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similar throughout the period shown.

Look at the bar
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in more detail, the USA has won a total of 2300 Olympic
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, including 900 gold
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, 800 silver
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, and 600
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bronde
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. The second on the
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is the Soviet Union with 1000 Olympic
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, while this country gold
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won higher than silver and bronze
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IELTS academic Olympic medals won by twelve different countries

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