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The illustration gives information about the changes that have taken place in a bookstore between 2000 and the present.

The illustration gives information about the changes that have taken place in a bookstore between 2000 and the present. K0or9
The illustration gives information about the changes that have taken place in a bookstore between 2000 and the present. Over a twenty-year period of time, this bookstore has witnessed dramatic transformation, especially in the central part. To begin with, in 2000, the area in the left of the entry point was dedicated for fiction books. After 21 years, it has been divided into four zone, where books on art, hobbies, cookery have been relocated from the center to their new aisles to be displayed with fiction ones. . At the back of the store, people used to keep fiction books which now have been replaced with non-fiction ones. Over two decades, the cafe shop has taken the position of the former non-fiction category to the right of the main door. The central area which was devoted for art, hobbies and cookery books has been cleared to make way for tables and chairs. However, both travel and new books zone at the opposite of the entrance still have kept unchanged from 2000 to 2021. Similarly, the service desk at the left corner of the bookstore has also stayed intact.
The illustration gives information about the
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changes
that have taken place in a bookstore between 2000 and the present. Over a twenty-year period of time, this bookstore has witnessed dramatic transformation,
especially
in the central part.

To
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begin
with, in 2000, the area in the
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left
of the entry point
was dedicated
for fiction
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books
. After 21 years, it has
been divided
into four
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zone
, where
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books
on art, hobbies, cookery have
been relocated
from the center to their new aisles to
be displayed
with fiction ones.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.
At the back of the store,
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people
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used
to
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keep
fiction
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books
which
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now
have
been replaced
with non-fiction ones. Over two decades, the
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
shop has taken the position of the former non-fiction category to the right of the main door. The central area which
was devoted
for art, hobbies and cookery
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books
has
been cleared
to
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make
way for tables and chairs.
However
, both travel and new
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books
zone at the opposite of the entrance
still
have
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kept
unchanged from 2000 to 2021.
Similarly
, the service desk at the
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left
corner of the bookstore has
also
stayed intact.
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IELTS academic The illustration gives information about the changes that have taken place in a bookstore between 2000 and the present.

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188 words
6.0
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