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The map below show the changes in an American town between 1994 and 2010

The map illustrate the changes that were made in a town between 1994 and 2010 in America. Overall, it is obvious that despite some changes and relocation of buildings or the establishment of new facilities, it's main structure remained almost the same. In detail, there was a local supermarket in the West in 1994, near the canal which was replaced by commercial buildings in 2010, similarly the church in South West of the town was removed and sport stadium was builted. In addition, the roads remain same in both years, Beside this there are number of residential houses in South East of the town. Furthermore, a new airport was established in East direction by removing factories likewisely, the supermarket was shifted in the centre of the town and in the left and right side of the market there are commercial buildings whereas, in the North side of the town there was a petrol pump which remain same in year 1994 and 2010
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and relocation of buildings or the establishment of new facilities, it's main structure remained almost the same. In detail, there was a local supermarket in the West in 1994, near the canal which
was replaced
by commercial buildings in 2010,
similarly
the church in South West of the
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town
was removed
and sport stadium
was builted
.
In addition
, the roads remain same in both years, Beside this there are number of residential
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houses
in South East of the
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town
.
Furthermore
, a new airport
was established
in East direction by removing factories
likewisely
, the supermarket
was shifted
in the centre of the
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town
and in the
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left
and right side of the market there are commercial buildings whereas, in the North side of the
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town
there was a petrol pump which remain same in year 1994 and 2010

IELTS academic The map below show the changes in an American town between 1994 and 2010

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