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He line graph compare the amount of money

The line graph compares the amount of money which was earned monthly by four restaurants in a town in 2010. Overall, it is immediately apparent that the income of all restaurants had increased overwhelmingly except Spicy Fortune which had to see drastic downfall just before the end even though it was most popular restaurant in January with far greater income. The most striking fact to emerge from the line graph is that in January 2010, the earning of Spicy Fortune was 1, 60, 000 dollars, while, Grand Fiesta was at one lac and this figure halved in case of Evening Paradise. On the other hand, Delicacy had as same as half income of Evening Paradise, 25 thousand dollars to be more precise. There were major rises and falls in the earnings of Evening Paradise and Spicy forerun from January to December and ended with approximately three times less 50, 000 and four folds extra 1, 00, 000 earnings respectively. As per the remaining statistics, the income of Grand Fiesta showed a slight slump till August before reaching at it's previous earning point, at 1 lac dollars to be exact. From August to December, Grand Fiesta managed to reach it's ever highest monthly earning in a single year around 140 thousand dollars. On the other hand, growth of Evening Paradise had nosedived after keeping increasing to 1lac dollars. Then later somewhere between September and December it surpassed Spicy fortune and Grand Fiesta and reached on the vertex with around 2 lac dollars monthly income.
The line graph compares the amount of money which
was earned
monthly by four restaurants in a town in 2010.

Overall
, it is immediately apparent that the
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income
of all restaurants had increased
overwhelmingly
except
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Spicy
Fortune which had to
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see
drastic downfall
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before
the
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even though
it was most popular restaurant in January with far greater income.

The most striking fact to emerge from the line graph is that in January 2010, the
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earning
of
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Spicy
Fortune was 1, 60, 000
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dollars
, while,
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Grand
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Fiesta
was at one lac and this figure halved in case of Evening
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Paradise
.
On the other hand
, Delicacy had as same as half
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income
of Evening
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Paradise
, 25 thousand
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dollars
to be more precise. There were major rises and falls in the
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earnings
of Evening
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Paradise
and
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Spicy
forerun from January to December and ended with approximately three times less 50, 000 and four folds extra 1, 00, 000
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earnings
respectively
.

As per the remaining statistics, the
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of
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Grand
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Fiesta
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showed
a slight slump till August
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before
reaching at it's previous
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earning
point, at 1 lac
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dollars
to be exact. From August to December,
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Grand
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Fiesta
managed to reach it's ever highest monthly
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earning
in a single year around 140 thousand
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dollars
.
On the other hand
, growth of Evening
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Paradise
had nosedived after keeping increasing to 1lac
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dollars
. Then later somewhere between September and December it surpassed
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Spicy
fortune and
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Grand
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Fiesta
and reached on the vertex with around 2 lac
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monthly
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