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The map below gives information about a school in 2004 and the change of the same school in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The map below gives information about a school in 2004 and the change of the same school in 2010. yLoN3
The two pictures compare the school layout in the year 2004 and how it changed in 2010. It is clear that the main change for 2010 involved buildings. Additionally, the school was able to accommodate more students. In 2004, there were 600 students attending Hogwards Grammar School, and a sports field and school building were connected by a walking path. Moreover, in the northeast of the school, there was a car park with many trees surrounding the way to get in. However, in 2010, the school was expanded with new facilities and two buildings. First, the number of pupils studying at school increased to 1000 pupils. The sport field’s size was diminished to erect two more buildings. Furthermore, the old and new school buildings were connected by a walking path. However, the walking connection with the sport field was demolished. Moreover, a new road will also be built from the main entrance to the second car park. Finally, there was no change in the number of plants and the original car park.
The two pictures compare the
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layout in the year 2004 and how it
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changed
in 2010.

It is
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clear
that the main
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change
for 2010 involved
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buildings
.
Additionally
, the
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school
was able to accommodate more students.

In 2004, there were 600 students attending
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Hogwards
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School
, and a sports field and
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school
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building
were connected
by a walking path.
Moreover
, in the northeast of the
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school
, there was a car park with
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many
trees surrounding the way to
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get
in.

However
, in 2010, the
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school
was expanded
with new facilities and two
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buildings
.
First
, the number of pupils studying at
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school
increased to 1000 pupils. The sport field’s size
was diminished
to erect two more
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buildings
.
Furthermore
, the
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old
and new
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school
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buildings
were connected
by a walking path.
However
, the walking connection with the sport field
was demolished
.
Moreover
, a new road will
also
be built
from the main entrance to the second car park.
Finally
, there was no
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change
in the number of plants and the original car park.
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IELTS academic The map below gives information about a school in 2004 and the change of the same school in 2010.

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4 paragraphs
171 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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