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The main purpose of the two maps is illustrate the differences between University site in a 10-year-interval from 2010 to now.

The main purpose of the two maps is illustrate the differences between University site in a 10-year-interval from 2010 to now. Overall, it is perfectly clear to observe that the Student accommodation buildings had been increased in terms of quantity and size: In 2010 used to be two buildings, a bigger one and a smaller one; now there are three of them, all the same size as the bigger one. Two of them are located almost in front of the lake, crossing the street, and the other one is exactly where the Shops used to be based. The shops and restaurant were relocated to a new building called Student facilities, which is precisely based where the small Student Accommodation building used to be. In addition, the lawn & seating area around the lake was removed, and a new road was made in front of it. It is very interesting to notice that the teaching block was divided in two different new buildings, Science and the Arts building, which is placed where the University office used to be, and where the teaching block were, respectively. The University Campus developed and extended significantly over those years.
The main purpose of the two maps is
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illustrate
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differences between University site in a 10-year-interval from 2010 to
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now
.

Overall
, it is
perfectly
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clear
to observe that the Student accommodation
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buildings
had
been increased
in terms of quantity and size: In 2010
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used
to be two
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buildings
, a bigger one and a smaller one;
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now
there are three of them, all the same size as the bigger one. Two of them
are located
almost in front of the lake, crossing the street, and the other one is exactly where the Shops
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used
to
be based
.

The shops and restaurant
were relocated
to a new
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building
called Student facilities, which is
precisely
based where the
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small
Student Accommodation
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building
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used
to be.
In addition
, the lawn & seating area around the lake
was removed
, and a new road
was made
in front of it.

It is
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very
interesting to notice that the teaching block
was divided
in two
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different
new
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buildings
, Science and the Arts
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building
, which
is placed
where the University office
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used
to be, and where the teaching block were,
respectively
.

The University Campus developed and extended
significantly
over those years.
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IELTS academic The main purpose of the two maps is illustrate the differences between University site in a 10-year-interval from 2010 to now.

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