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The lines of blues gives information about the percentage of the woman age of 1564 of employs between the 2003 and 2009?

The lines of blues gives information about the percentage of the woman age of 1564 of employs between the 2003 and 2009? VyqYK
The line graph composite proposition of the females age groups of 15 and 64 in working between from 2003 to 2009. Overall it is clear from the graph employs news from the female in the age in Iceland decrease the percentage of the female aged 15 to 64 been employed in other nations increasing the addition of the trend of Iceland is higher the given period. Looking at the graph in more detail Canada and Germany has 60 and 70% in 2003 of women employed respectively it has table till 2009 where as Iceland has the 25% in 2003 slightly decreases to 20% by 2005 and it was to continue 25% by the end of the period China has the female working in the given of 35% in 2012 rows it till 5% higher by contrast time I said is the highest of all the nations have 80% in 2003 of women work working the given contrast forced to enter stable at 78% by 2009
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age groups of 15 and 64 in working between from 2003 to 2009.

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aged 15 to 64
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Looking at the graph in more detail Canada and Germany has 60 and 70% in 2003 of women employed
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Iceland has the 25% in 2003
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decreases to 20% by 2005 and it was to continue 25% by the
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IELTS academic The lines of blues gives information about the percentage of the woman age of 1564 of employs between the 2003 and 2009?

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