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The line graphs show the value of Australia's trade with USA, the China and Japan from 2002 to 2005 in Billion of Australian Dollars ($AUD)

The line graphs show the value of Australia's trade with USA, the China and Japan from 2002 to 2005 in Billion of Australian Dollars ($AUD) 90n7
The given 3 line graphs compare the value of Australia's trade with 3 different nations between 2002 and 2005 in billions of Australian dollars ($AUD). From the overall analysis, Australia's trade with USA was increasing from 2002 to 2004 and then it decreased last year. Meanwhile, the trade with Japan was gradually rising till 2004, afterwards it remained relatively stable. Getting into details, with regards to the import of Australia with China had 4. 4 $AUD in 2002 and then it dropped to 2. 5 $AUD in the second year. In the next two years, it was dramatically inclining with 4. 5$AUD. In case of China's exports was fluctuating between 2. 4$AUD and nearly 3$AUD over the given period. Moving further, the trade of Australia with USA was escalating during three years. By the end of 2005, imports and exports were declining. Although, the exports of USA started at 2. 5$AUD and slightly grew to 3$AUD in 2004, by following this, it fell with 2. 6$AUD in 2005. Whereas, the imports of USA was initiating from 1. 6 $AUD in the initial year to 2. 5 $AUD in 2004, and then diminished 2. 1$AUD in the final year. Looking at the imports Japan had 0. 8$AUD in 2002 and then it was slowly climbing up to 2004 with 1. 6 $AUD. After that, it remained comparatively plateaue in 2005. In the sme way, the exports of Japan had 1. 2$AUD in 2002, then slightly proliferated to 2. 6 $AUd in 2004, in the last year, it was a leveling off with 2. 6$AUD.
The
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trade
with 3
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different
nations between 2002 and 2005 in billions of Australian dollars (
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$AUD
). From the
overall
analysis, Australia's
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trade
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with USA
was increasing from 2002 to 2004 and then it decreased last
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year
. Meanwhile, the
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trade
with Japan was
gradually
rising till 2004, afterwards it remained
relatively
stable. Getting into
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details
,
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with regards to
the
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import
of Australia with China had 4.
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4 $
AUD in 2002 and then it dropped to 2.
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5 $
AUD in the second
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year
. In the
next
two years, it was
dramatically
inclining with 4.
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5$
AUD. In case of China's
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exports
was fluctuating between 2.
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4$
AUD and
nearly
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3$
AUD over the
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given
period. Moving
further
, the
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trade
of Australia
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with USA
was escalating during three years. By the
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end
of 2005,
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imports
and
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exports
were declining.
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exports
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of USA
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started
at 2.
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5$
AUD and
slightly
grew to
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3$
AUD in 2004, by following this, it fell with 2.
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6$
AUD in 2005.
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, the
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imports
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of USA
was initiating from 1.
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6 $
AUD in the initial
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year
to 2.
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5 $
AUD in 2004, and then diminished 2.
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1$
AUD in the final
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. Looking at the
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imports
Japan had 0.
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8$
AUD in 2002 and then it was
slowly
climbing up to 2004 with 1.
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6 $
AUD. After that, it remained
comparatively
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plateaue
in 2005. In the
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sme
way, the
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exports
of Japan had 1.
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2$
AUD in 2002, then
slightly
proliferated to 2.
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6 $
AUd in 2004, in the last
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year
, it was a leveling off with 2.
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6$
AUD.
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IELTS academic The line graphs show the value of Australia's trade with USA, the China and Japan from 2002 to 2005 in Billion of Australian Dollars ($AUD)

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