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The line graphs show the percentage of people using public transport and people using private cars in five cities of Australia from 2000 to 2010.

The line graphs show the percentage of people using public transport and people using private cars in five cities of Australia from 2000 to 2010. oWwb
The line graphs illustrate the changes of the percentage of the citizens using public transportation and using private cars in five different cities in Australia from 2000 to 2010. The percentage of those who use public transportation fluctuated in all cities during these ten years, among which the proportion of Sydney occupies the leading place. The second place and third place were owned by Perth and Adelaide respectively. The lowest percentage, which was around 5%, belonged to Melbourne. The percentage of those who chose the private cars outnumbered that of the citizens who used the public transportation. The ten years witnessed the gradual increase in all five cities, with Melbourne rising from 80% to 90%, making it the city where the private car was most popular. Although the citizens in the city of Sydney constituted the smallest proportion in private transportation, it still underwent an increase, from 20% to 25%. In summary, private transport was more welcomed in the five cities in Australia, with only a small proportion of people choosing public transportation.
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and using
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in Australia from 2000 to 2010.

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fluctuated in all
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during these ten years, among which the proportion of Sydney occupies the leading place.
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, which was around 5%, belonged to Melbourne.

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of those who chose the
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cars outnumbered that of the citizens who
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, with Melbourne rising from 80% to 90%, making it the city where the
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car was most popular. Although the citizens in the city of Sydney constituted the smallest proportion in
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, it
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transport was more welcomed in the five
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IELTS academic The line graphs show the percentage of people using public transport and people using private cars in five cities of Australia from 2000 to 2010.

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