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The line graphs show the percentage of people using public transport and people using private cars in five cities of Australia from 2000 to 2010.

The line graphs show the percentage of people using public transport and people using private cars in five cities of Australia from 2000 to 2010. KAB3
the given poly line graph provides the information about usage of public transport as well as private cars in various cities of Australia between 2000 to 2010. the data has been calibrated in percentage. overall, it can be witnessed that in sydney the usage of public transportation was equal from 2000 to 2010 along with Adelaide, but it seemed like it had been opposite in case of using the private vehicles. To begin with, Sydney was elevated (25) whereas, Melbourne was lowest (5) in usage of public transportation by masses in one decade. Moreover, in Perth and Adelaide both were slightly similar (15) and more than (10) respectively but Canberra was merely alone city there on was stable usage of transport
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of public transportation was equal from 2000 to 2010 along with Adelaide,
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it seemed like it had been opposite in case of using the private vehicles. To
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with, Sydney
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of public transportation by masses in one decade.
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similar (15) and more than (10)
respectively
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IELTS academic The line graphs show the percentage of people using public transport and people using private cars in five cities of Australia from 2000 to 2010.

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