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The line graphs illustrate the changes in putting electrical appliances to use and the number of hours spent on household chores in one country during the period from 1920 to 2019.

The line graphs illustrate the changes in putting electrical appliances to use and the number of hours spent on household chores in one country during the period from 1920 to 2019. NmqxN
The line graphs illustrate the changes in putting electrical appliances to use and the number of hours spent on household chores in one country during the period from 1920 to 2019. Overall, it is obvious, that the percentage of all three electrical appliances has significantly increased throughout the whole period with the refrigerator reaching a peak in 2019. On the other hand, the quantity of time dedicated to household work has dropped remarkably to 0 by the end of the period. It is clear that washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner levelled off differently 40%, 30% and 0% respectively. The percentage of using refrigerator soared from 0% in 1920 to 100% reaching a peak in 1980. The percentage of vacuum cleaner and washing machine were rather similar, nevertheless there was a gradual rise of running the vacuum cleaner from 30% to 100%, while the usage of washing machine declined slightly to 60% in 1980. Next 40 years the numbers rose minimally and remained relatively stable. Also, it is obvious, that with implementing household appliances, the quantity of time spent on house chores declined significantly from 50 hours per week in 1920 to merely 10 hours in 2019 hitting a low.
The line graphs illustrate the
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changes
in putting electrical appliances to
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use
and the number of hours spent on household chores in one country during the period from 1920 to 2019.

Overall
, it is obvious, that the percentage of all three electrical appliances has
significantly
increased throughout the whole period with the refrigerator reaching a peak in 2019.
On the other hand
, the quantity of time dedicated to household work has dropped
remarkably
to 0 by the
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end
of the period.

It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner levelled off
differently
40%, 30% and 0%
respectively
. The percentage of using refrigerator soared from 0% in 1920 to 100% reaching a peak in 1980. The percentage of vacuum cleaner and washing machine were
rather
similar,
nevertheless
there was a gradual rise of running the vacuum cleaner from 30% to 100%, while the usage of washing machine declined
slightly
to 60% in 1980.
Next
40 years the numbers rose
minimally
and remained
relatively
stable.

Also
, it is obvious, that with implementing household appliances, the quantity of time spent on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
chores declined
significantly
from 50 hours per week in 1920 to
merely
10 hours in 2019 hitting a low.
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