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The line graph sohws the consumption of fast food of australian teenagers

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The given line graph depicts the Australian teenagers’ habit of fast food consumption between 1975 and 2000 years. It can be seen from the graph that the popularity of hamburgers rose dramatically among the Australian teenagers whereas the fish and chips gradually decreased. According to the graph, in 1975, the fish and chips were very famous among the teenagers of Australia. Moreover, at that time, it was eaten almost 100 times per year. After that in 1980, the popularity of fish and chips decreased consistently; again it increased slightly in 1985. Then from 1985 to 2000 the demand for this fast food fell significantly: just under the 40 times eaten per year. On the other hand, it appears from the graph that the popularity of pizzas and hamburgers rose substantially. Nevertheless, the demand for pizza was constant over a period of 1995 to 2000 and it was nearly eaten 85 times in a year. On the other side, the consumption rate of hamburgers exponentially increased from 1985 to 2000 and the number of eaten times per year was just above 100 times.
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depicts the Australian
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’ habit of
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food consumption between 1975 and 2000 years. It can be
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that the popularity of hamburgers rose
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among the Australian
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teenagers
whereas the fish and chips
gradually
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, in 1975, the fish and chips were
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among the
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of Australia.
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, it was
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almost 100
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per
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. After that in 1980, the popularity of fish and chips decreased
consistently
; again it increased
slightly
in 1985. Then from 1985 to 2000 the demand for this
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food fell
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under the 40
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per year.

On the other hand
, it appears from the
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that the popularity of pizzas and hamburgers rose
substantially
.
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, the demand for pizza was constant over a period of 1995 to 2000 and it was
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85
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in a
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. On the other side, the consumption rate of hamburgers
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increased from 1985 to 2000 and the number of
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per
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IELTS academic The line graph sohws the consumption of fast food of australian teenagers

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