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The line graph shows the number of unemployment rates in the United State and Japan between 2005 and 2011

The line graph shows the number of unemployment rates in the United State and Japan between 2005 and 2011 aQwkX
The line graph compares the proportion of unemployment in the United State and Japan over 6 years. Overall, there was an opposite of the unemployment rates in the two countries. The number of jobless people in the USA decreased significantly during the survey, while the proportion of unemployed people in Japan increased dramatically. Nevertheless, at the end of the research, there was the same in the rates of unemployment in the US and Japan. In 2005, around 7 out of one hundred Americans were unemployed. In the same year, the percentage of jobless Japanese was only about 2, 5%. After one year, when the US community without a job were considerably fell to around 6%. Conversely, the rates of unemployment in Japan grew constantly to nearly 3, 7%. After that, the Jobless American rates kept on dropped, while its in Japan still rose considerably. In the middle of 2010, not only the amounts of American and Japanese people, did not have a job, were stood at the same stage approx 5%, but also the percentage of jobless US and Japan community were barely changed during the final year in the studied.
The line graph compares the proportion of
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unemployment
in the United State and
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Japan
over 6 years.

Overall
, there was an opposite of the
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unemployment
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rates
in the two countries. The number of jobless
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people
in the USA decreased
significantly
during the survey, while the proportion of unemployed
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people
in
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Japan
increased
dramatically
.
Nevertheless
, at the
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end
of the research, there was the same in the
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rates
of
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unemployment
in the US and Japan.

In 2005, around 7 out of one hundred Americans
were unemployed
. In the same year, the percentage of jobless Japanese was
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only
about 2, 5%. After one year, when the US community without a job were
considerably
fell to around 6%.
Conversely
, the
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rates
of
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unemployment
in
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Japan
grew
constantly
to
nearly
3, 7%. After that, the Jobless American
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rates
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kept
on dropped, while its in
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Japan
still
rose
considerably
.

In the middle of 2010, not
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only
the amounts of American and Japanese
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people
, did not have a job,
were stood
at the same stage approx 5%,
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but
also
the percentage of jobless US and
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Japan
community were
barely
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changed
during the final year in the studied.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the number of unemployment rates in the United State and Japan between 2005 and 2011

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