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The line graph shows the number of population shows TV and Radio from october -november 1992.

The line graph shows the number of population shows TV and Radio from october -november 1992. wBMan

The line graph illustrates the number of audiences(over 4 years old) enjoying audio and television in day from October - december 1992. Time are measured in with 2 hour interval and population are measured in percentage. Overall, the number of TV audiences were more than the Radio audiences. The days starts with the equal number of TV and Radio audiences but after the time passes the number of audio audiences increased significantly whereas as the time passes the amount of TV audiences increased rapidly and at the end of the day its decreases sharply. With regards to the amount of TV audiences at 1. 00 clock it was 5% - 10% of population watching TV and within half hour its decreases. At 5. 00 clock the number TV audiences increases slightly and gradually falls to under 5% at 11: 30. From 11: 30 the number of TV watchers rose to 15% at 11: 30 and from that as the passed the amount of TV audiences rose gradually to just under 45%at 21. 00 clock and decreases steeply to just over 10% at the end of the day. On the other hand, at the beginning of the day the number of audio audiences is under 5% and remain almost unchanged at 6: 00 clock. From 7: 00 clock the amount of audio audiences rose sharply to 25% and decreases gradually as the passes. At 15. 00 clock there was an increased in audio audiences for 3 hours and it decreases again slightly and ends up as like as the beginning of the day at just under 5%.

The line graph illustrates the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of audiences(over 4 years This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
) enjoying audio and television in day from Consider using an n-dash (half dash), if you want to indicate numerical ranges or time ranges.October – decemberOctober–december
October - december
 1992. Time are measured
 in with 2 hour interval and population are measured
 in percentage.

Overall
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of TV You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgatheringcrowdgallerycongregationpublicmarket
audiences
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audiences
. The days You should probably use "start".start
starts
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number
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audiences
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but
 after the time passes the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of audio You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgatheringcrowdgallerycongregationpublicmarket
audiences
 increased significantly
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amount
 of TV You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgatheringcrowdgallerycongregationpublicmarket
audiences
 increased rapidly
 and at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of the day its You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdeclinelossshrinkagecutbackdiscountreduction
decreases
sharply
.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".In regard toWith regard toRegarding
With regards to
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amount
 of TV You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgatheringcrowdgallerycongregationpublicmarket
audiences
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clock
 it was 5% Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.—
-
 10% of population watching TV and within half hour its You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdeclinelossshrinkagecutbackdiscountreduction
decreases
. At 5. 00 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withalarmtimer
clock
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 TV You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgatheringcrowdgallerycongregationpublicmarket
audiences
 increases slightly
 and gradually
 falls to under 5% at 11: 30. From 11: 30 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of TV watchers rose to 15% at 11: 30 and from that as the passed the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withloadbulkextentsupplychunknumber
amount
 of TV You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgatheringcrowdgallerycongregationpublicmarket
audiences
 rose gradually
 to This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
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clock
 and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdeclinelossshrinkagecutbackdiscountreduction
decreases
steeply
 to This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 over 10% at the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of the day.

On the other hand
, at the beginning of the day the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of audio You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgatheringcrowdgallerycongregationpublicmarket
audiences
 is under 5% and remain almost unchanged at 6: 00 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withalarmtimer
clock
. From 7: 00 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withalarmtimer
clock
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withloadbulkextentsupplychunknumber
amount
 of audio You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgatheringcrowdgallerycongregationpublicmarket
audiences
 rose sharply
 to 25% and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdeclinelossshrinkagecutbackdiscountreduction
decreases
gradually
 as the passes. At 15. 00 Possible agreement error. The noun 'clock' seems to be countable, so consider using: "clocks", "clox".clocksclox
clock
 there was an increased in audio You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgatheringcrowdgallerycongregationpublicmarket
audiences
 for 3 hours and it You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdeclinelossshrinkagecutbackdiscountreduction
decreases
 again slightly
 and ends up as like as the beginning of the day at This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
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