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The line graph shows the income of four restaurants during the time period of a year

The line graph shows the income of four restaurants during the time period of a year VBdL3
The rendered line graph depicts the information about the figure of total income of Delicacy, Evening paradise, Grand Fiesta and Spicy Fortune during a whole year. Data has been calibrated in thousands. At a fleeting glance, it is immensely clear that, the highest amount of income is generated by Evening Paradise; however, least by Spicy Fortune. In addition to it, there are fluctuations in the income level. To begin, in the very first month the income is just over 20 in case of Delicacy. Interestingly, the earning level lay between the range of 20 and 40 during following three months. In may the level of income generation reaches exactly at 40. There is sudden decease, and gets almost half in next 30 days. After having variations the income level reaches at 12 in month of December. By contrast, the income level continues to rise till May, and wavered around 90 in month of June and July. Moreover, the pay level drops dramatically to just over half in month of September while due to abrupt rise it reaches at the peak over 180 in last month. Turning towards rest of description, the income level ofGrand Fiesta initiating at 100 in January and falls by 20 in following two months, and remains stabilise at 80 till July. Meanwhile, during the remaining five months steady rise is observed, and it remains under 140 in December. Eventually, in case of Spicy Fortune, the pay level hovers between 160 and 120 in first two months. Surprisingly, the level of income decreases dramatically till September, and comes to 120. In conrast, the pay level is upsurged by 20 thousands in October. Yet, it plummets to just over 40 till the last month of the year.
The rendered line graph depicts the information about the figure of total
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income
of Delicacy, Evening paradise, Grand Fiesta and Spicy Fortune during a whole year. Data has
been calibrated
in thousands. At a fleeting glance, it is
immensely
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clear
that, the highest amount of
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income
is generated
by Evening Paradise;
however
, least by Spicy Fortune.
In addition
to it, there are fluctuations in the
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income
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level
. To
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begin
, in the
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very
first
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month
the
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is
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just
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over
20 in case of Delicacy.
Interestingly
, the earning
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level
lay between the range of 20 and 40 during following three
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months
. In
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may
the
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of
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generation reaches exactly at 40. There is sudden decease, and
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gets
almost half in
next
30 days.
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After
having variations the
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level
reaches at 12 in
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of December. By contrast, the
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income
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level
continues to rise till May, and wavered around 90 in
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of June and July.
Moreover
, the pay
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level
drops
dramatically
to
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just
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over
half in
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month
of September while due to abrupt rise it reaches at the peak
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over
180 in last
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month
. Turning towards rest of description, the
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level
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ofGrand
Fiesta initiating at 100 in January and falls by 20 in following two
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, and remains
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stabilise
at 80 till July. Meanwhile, during the remaining five
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steady rise
is observed
, and it remains under 140 in December.
Eventually
, in case of Spicy Fortune, the pay
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level
hovers between 160 and 120 in
first
two
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months
.
Surprisingly
, the
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level
of
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decreases
dramatically
till September, and
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comes
to 120. In
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conrast
, the pay
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level
is upsurged
by 20 thousands in October.
Yet
, it plummets to
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40 till the last
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month
of the year.
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