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The provided line greph demonstrate the change in rate of earning along with monthly achievement in a health club during 2015. Overall, the figure of profit showed overall southward trend with fluctuations, whereas the performance of every month increased linearly. According to the line chart, it can be seen that the leading chain of health club made a continue progress in income until last month, where it reached at 13 %. Similarly, the noticeable fluctuations were seen in profit of health club where in very first month, the growth of sales was 8% which saw a increment of 3% in February. Whereas, the rise in revenue went down which reached at merely 3% in March. By contrast, during the month of April, it witnessed a sharp rise to touch it's pinnacle at 13%. Furthermore, with little changes the rate of income hinted it's nodier in July. The growth rate was 8% in August. However, it stagnated at 7-8% between August to October. In last month, the change in rate went up again to 13%.
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of earning along with monthly achievement in a health club during 2015.
Overall
, the figure of profit
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overall
southward trend with fluctuations, whereas the performance of every
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month
increased
linearly
. According to the line chart, it can be
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that the leading chain of health club made
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progress in income until last
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, where it reached at 13 %.
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, the noticeable fluctuations were
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in profit of health club where in
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first
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month
, the growth of sales was 8% which
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increment of 3% in February.
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, the rise in revenue went down which reached at
merely
3% in March. By contrast, during the
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month
of April, it witnessed a sharp rise
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to touch it's pinnacle
at 13%.
Furthermore
, with
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little
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the
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rate
of income hinted it's
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nodier
in July. The growth
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was 8% in August.
However
, it stagnated at 7-8% between August to October. In last
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month
, the
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change
in
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rate
went up again to 13%.

IELTS academic the line graph shows the growth in revenue and monthly performance of a leading chain of a health club for 2015

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