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The line graph shows the free time activities such as reading, hiking, theatre, watching TV, and surfing the internet of the elderly in the United States from 1980 to 2010.

The line graph shows the free time activities such as reading, hiking, theatre, watching TV, and surfing the internet of the elderly in the United States from 1980 to 2010. XN2A
First of all, Unlike theatre, other activities increased their percentages in 2010 from 1980. In 1980, Although the theatre was the second most preferred activity in the 1980s, it decreased until the 1990s and its percentages dropped from 50% to 30%. After the 1990s, its percentage started to rise gradually and reached between 50% and 40%. Watching TV is the most popular activity in the 1980s and was continued it's increased gently until 2000s but between 2000s and 2010s its percentage fell from between 70% and 60% and was second. The most increasing activity was hiking between the 1980s and 2010s and its percentage reached 80% from 20% and be first in 2010s. Secondly, reading activity is very fluctuated in the graph and experienced sharp declines and increases. Despite the fact that it started in the third place, its rate growth 10% and caught hiking rates, and shared second place. After this point, even if its percentage dipped in 2000, its rate increase like a rocket and turned back to third place in 2010. On the other hand, surfing the internet began with the last place in 1980. It increased gradually from the 1980s to the 2000s but after this years soared very fast and overtook theaters percentage in 2010s. As a result, except for the theatre, all activity percentages increased between the 1980s and 2010s. The most increase has been experienced in hiking and their percentages reached 80% from 20% in 2010.
First of all
, Unlike
theatre
, other
activities
increased
their
percentages
in 2010 from 1980. In 1980, Although the
theatre
was the second most preferred
activity
in the 1980s, it decreased until the 1990s and its
percentages
dropped from 50% to 30%. After the 1990s, its
percentage
started
to rise
gradually
and reached between 50% and 40%. Watching TV is the most popular
activity
in the 1980s and
was continued
it's
increased
gently
until 2000s
but
between 2000s and 2010s its
percentage
fell from between 70% and 60% and was second. The most increasing
activity
was hiking between the 1980s and 2010s and its
percentage
reached 80% from 20% and be
first
in 2010s
.

Secondly
, reading
activity
is
very
fluctuated in the graph and experienced sharp declines and increases. Despite the fact that it
started
in the third
place
, its rate growth 10% and caught hiking rates, and shared second
place
. After this point, even if its
percentage
dipped in 2000, its rate increase like a rocket and turned back to third
place
in 2010.
On the other hand
, surfing the internet began with the last
place
in 1980. It
increased
gradually
from the 1980s to the 2000s
but
after
this years
soared
very
fast
and overtook theaters
percentage
in 2010s
.

As a result
,
except for
the
theatre
, all
activity
percentages
increased
between the 1980s and 2010s. The most increase has
been experienced
in hiking and their
percentages
reached 80% from 20% in 2010.
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IELTS academic The line graph shows the free time activities such as reading, hiking, theatre, watching TV, and surfing the internet of the elderly in the United States from 1980 to 2010.

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