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The line graph shows the change in population of 5 countries from 1800 to 2020

The line graph shows the change in population of 5 countries from 1800 to 2020 BKrd
The line graph illustrates how the populations of 5 countries (China, India, the United States, Indonesia and Brazil) have changed over a 220 year period, from 1800 to 2020. Overall, all countries have experienced a rise in population, though the change has been the most dramatic for China and India. Looking first at the data for China and India, the former had a population of just over 300 million in 1800. This figure slowly fluctuated at around 400 million up to 1900. From 1900 to 1950 China’s population then gradually increased to 550 million. At this stage, there was a dramatic growth that saw the number reach 1. 44 billion in 2020. Although India began the period with a lower population (at 180 million people), this number slowly rose to almost 300 million in 1930 before rocketing to 1. 38 billion people in 2020. In contrast, the other three countries’ populations rose more gradually. The number of people living in the USA began noticeably growing in 1860, from around 50 million to approximately 130 million by 1940. This growth accelerated to over 300 million by 2020. Indonesia and Brazil had lower populations and both followed a similar trend, seeing their populations begin to rise dramatically in 1960 from under 100 million to around 280 million and 210 million, respectively.
The line graph illustrates how the
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of 5 countries (China, India, the United States,

Indonesia and Brazil) have
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changed
over a
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220 year
period, from 1800 to 2020.
Overall
, all countries

have experienced a rise in
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population
, though the
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change
has been the most dramatic for China and

India.

Looking
first
at the data for China and India, the former had a
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population
of
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just
over 300
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million
in

1800. This figure
slowly
fluctuated at around 400
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million
up to 1900. From 1900 to 1950 China’s

population then
gradually
increased to 550
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million
. At this stage, there was a dramatic growth that

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saw
the number reach 1. 44 billion in 2020. Although India began the period with a lower population

(at 180
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million
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people
), this number
slowly
rose to almost 300
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million
in 1930
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before
rocketing to

1. 38 billion
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people
in 2020.
In contrast
, the other three countries’
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populations
rose more
gradually
. The number of
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people
living

in the USA began
noticeably
growing in 1860, from around 50
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million
to approximately 130 million

by 1940. This growth accelerated to over 300
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million
by 2020. Indonesia and Brazil had lower

populations and both followed a similar trend, seeing their
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populations
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begin
to rise
dramatically
in

1960 from under 100
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million
to around 280
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million
and 210
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million
,
respectively
.
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