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The line graph illustrates the popularity of two different language options which were selected by students at age 13 in a school located in England between 2000 and the present day. It is clear that there were always more students who chose French as their second language than students who chose Mandarin. In 2000, the number of students who selected French was about 150, while there were just 10 students who chose Mandarin. From 2000 to 2005, the figure decreased rapidly for French, but rose sharply for Mandarin and reached a peak at 75 students. However, French still more popular than Mandarin. Since 2005, there has been a significant change in trend. French gained some popularity. On the other hand, the trend for Mandarin is the opposite. Then, the data started staying stable until the present day.
The line graph illustrates the popularity of two
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language options which
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students
at age 13 in a school located in England between 2000 and the present day. It is
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clear
that there were always more
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students
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who
chose French as their second language than
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students
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who
chose Mandarin.

In 2000, the number of
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students
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who
selected French was about 150, while there were
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just
10
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students
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who
chose Mandarin. From 2000 to 2005, the figure decreased
rapidly
for French,
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but
rose
sharply
for Mandarin and reached a peak at 75
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students
.
However
, French
still
more popular than Mandarin.

Since 2005, there has been a significant
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change
in trend. French gained
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some
popularity.
On the other hand
, the trend for Mandarin is the opposite. Then, the data
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started
staying stable until the present day.
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