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The line graph shows how much five different kinds of jam were sold in the USA from 2009 to 2014

The line graph shows how much five different kinds of jam were sold in the USA from 2009 to 2014 jo6AN
The line graph compares five different kinds of jam sold in the USA over a period of 5 years. Over the period shown, it is clear that all the five jam flavors experienced increases in sales except for plum whose sale figures actually fell. It can also be seen that strawberry and raspberry were by far the most preferable flavors of American people. In 2009, the sale of strawberry-flavored jam in the US was the highest, at around 3. 2 million units, which was around 0. 5 million units more than that of raspberry, the runner-up. And almost double that of cherry, ranked third in the chart. In 2010, the figures for these three types of jam saw an increase of between 0. 3 and 0. 5 million units. Over the next year, the figures for strawberry and raspberry rose by around 0. 4 million units, whereas that of cherry fell by 0. 5 million units. Over the rest of the period shown, the sale of strawberry-flavoured in the US market increased significantly, reaching a peak of 7 million units in 2014. Similar patterns can be seen as regards the sales of raspberry and cherry jams. To be more specific, the figures for these two flavors of jam rose significantly in 2012 before reaching a plateaus of approximately 5. 1 and 3. 1 million units respectively over the remaining period.
The line graph compares five
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kinds of jam sold in the USA over a
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of 5 years.

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shown, it is
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that all the five jam flavors experienced increases in
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sales
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plum whose
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actually fell. It can
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that strawberry and raspberry were by far the most preferable flavors of American
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people
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In 2009, the
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of strawberry-flavored jam in the US was the highest, at around 3. 2
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, which was around 0. 5
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more than that of raspberry, the runner-up. And almost double that of cherry, ranked third in the chart. In 2010, the
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for these three types of jam
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an increase of between 0. 3 and 0. 5
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. Over the
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for strawberry and raspberry rose by around 0. 4
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, whereas that of cherry fell by 0. 5
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Over the rest of the
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shown, the
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of
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strawberry-flavoured
in the US market increased
significantly
, reaching a peak of 7
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in 2014. Similar patterns can be
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seen
as regards the
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sales
of raspberry and cherry jams. To be more specific, the
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for these two flavors of jam rose
significantly
in 2012
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of approximately 5. 1 and 3. 1
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