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The line graph compares the water usage across the globe for domestic, industrial and agriculture sector from 1900 till 2000 also table provides the information of water consumption for irrigation and per person in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo. Overall, it is immediately apparent that the worldwide water consumption for agriculture rapidly rose from the year 1900 to 2000. We can also see that the largest amount of water was utilized in Brazil as compared to the Democratic Republic of Congo. In 1990, approximately 500km3 of water was consumed across the globe in farming whereas the proportion water was consumed for household and industries was one-fifth of that amount. By 2000, the water consumption pattern has drastically grown by 3000km3 for the farmland. On the contrary, the usage was raised just above one-third for the industry grid and 500km for the homes. In the year 2000, the population growth for Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo were 176 million and 5. 2 million respectively. The water consumed per person in Brazil, at 395m, was much higher than that in the congo at only 8m and could be explained by the fact that Brazil had 265 times more irrigated land.
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usage across the globe for domestic, industrial and agriculture sector
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also
table provides the information of
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consumption for irrigation and per person in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

Overall
, it is immediately apparent that the worldwide
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consumption for agriculture
rapidly
rose from the year 1900 to 2000. We can
also
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see
that the largest amount of
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was utilized
in Brazil as compared to the Democratic Republic of Congo.

In 1990, approximately 500km3 of
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water
was consumed
across the globe in farming whereas the proportion
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water
was consumed
for household and industries was one-fifth of that amount. By 2000, the
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water
consumption pattern has
drastically
grown by 3000km3 for the farmland.
On the contrary
, the usage
was raised
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just
above one-third for the industry grid and
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500km
for the homes.

In the year 2000, the population growth for Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo were 176 million and 5. 2 million
respectively
. The
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consumed per person in Brazil, at
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395m
, was much higher than that in the
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by the fact that Brazil had 265 times more irrigated land.
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