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The line graph represents information on three different non-spreadable diseases in one specific country from 2007 to 2011.

The line graph represents information on three different non-spreadable diseases in one specific country from 2007 to 2011. J3aa6
The line graph represents information on three different non-spreadable diseases in one specific country from 2007 to 2011. Overall, it is obvious that the number of CVD cases was larger than that of the other viruses. On the other hand, the scenario for cancer and diabetes concerns was less severe. To go into the specifics, the number of CVD cases in 2007 was roughly 3500. Following 2007, the number of persons affected by CVD increased substantially, reaching a peak in 2010 with 5000 patients. However, in 2011, it has constantly dropped to 4000 patients. Moving on to the remainder of the specifics, the total number of patients with diabetes were less than 1000 in 2007. Surprisingly, the number of diabetes cases increased sharply, reaching a peak in 2009 with 4000 varieties. On the contrary, the cancer variations remained stable during the course of the study. Following that, the number of cancer patients was roughly 1500 in 2007. The number of cancer patients progressively increased until 2011, when it reached slightly over 2000 people. However, the number of diabetes patients fell drastically and returned to its original level in 2011 with 1000 individuals.
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non-spreadable diseases in one specific country from 2007 to 2011.
Overall
, it is obvious that the
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number
of CVD cases was larger than that of the other viruses.
On the other hand
, the scenario for
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cancer
and diabetes concerns was less severe.

To go into the specifics, the
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number
of CVD cases in 2007 was roughly 3500. Following 2007, the
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number
of persons
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affected
by CVD increased
substantially
, reaching a peak in 2010 with 5000
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patients
.
However
, in 2011, it has
constantly
dropped to 4000
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patients
. Moving on to the remainder of the specifics, the total
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number
of
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patients
with diabetes were less than 1000 in 2007.
Surprisingly
, the
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number
of diabetes cases increased
sharply
, reaching a peak in 2009 with 4000 varieties.
On the contrary
, the
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cancer
variations remained stable during the course of the study. Following that, the
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number
of
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cancer
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patients
was roughly 1500 in 2007. The
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number
of
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cancer
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patients
progressively
increased until 2011, when it reached
slightly
over 2000
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people
.
However
, the
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number
of diabetes
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fell
drastically
and returned to its original level in 2011 with 1000 individuals.
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IELTS academic The line graph represents information on three different non-spreadable diseases in one specific country from 2007 to 2011.

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