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The given pie chart illustrates the employment status of Anthropology graduates in a particular university after completing their undergraduate, with the table indicating the income of an anthropologist in three different types of employment after working 5 years.

The given pie chart illustrates the employment status of Anthropology graduates in a particular university after completing their undergraduate, with the table indicating the income of an anthropologist in three different types of employment after working 5 years. 2x11X
The given pie chart illustrates the employment status of Anthropology graduates in a particular university after completing their undergraduate, with the table indicating the income of an anthropologist in three different types of employment after working 5 years. Overall, it is evident that full-time work was the highest position, the opposite was true for the part-time work and postgrad study. Moreover, the percentage of employees working in Freelance consultants and Government sector was the same in lowest salaries range, while with the highest-paid aspect, those working for government witnessed the highest proportion. It is immediately obvious from the pie chart that full-time work constituted 52%, becoming the highest position. Meanwhile, unemployed and part-time work positions accounted for 15% and 12% respectively. The full-time postgrad and unknown occupy had the same proportion with 8%, compared to part-time work and postgrad study with just 5%. With the table, it tended that the range between 25, 000$ to 49, 999$ witnessed the same percentage from those who work as freelance consultants and in government sector with only 5%, lower than a half the rate of employees who work at private companies. In contrast, the proportions of those working as freelance consultants, in governments and private companies in the highest range income constituted 40%, 50% and 30% respectively.
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was the highest position, the opposite was true for the part-time
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in Freelance consultants and
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Government
sector was the same in
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lowest
salaries range, while with the highest-paid aspect, those
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working
for
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government
witnessed the highest proportion.

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work
constituted 52%, becoming the highest position. Meanwhile, unemployed and part-time
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positions accounted for 15% and 12%
respectively
. The full-time
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postgrad
and unknown occupy had the same proportion with 8%, compared to part-time
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work
and
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postgrad
study with
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5%.

With the table, it tended that the range between 25,
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000$
to 49,
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999$
witnessed the same percentage from those who
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work
as freelance consultants and in
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government
sector with
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only
5%, lower than a half the rate of employees who
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at private
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companies
.
In contrast
, the proportions of those
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as freelance consultants, in
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governments
and private
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companies
in the highest range income constituted 40%, 50% and 30%
respectively
.

IELTS academic The given pie chart illustrates the employment status of Anthropology graduates in a particular university after completing their undergraduate, with the table indicating the income of an anthropologist in three different types of employment after working 5 years.

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