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the changes that took place in the valley shopping center in 1982 and in 2012.

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The maps illustrate the changes that took place in the valley shopping center in 1982 and in 2012. Overall over the 30-year period shopping center became less rural and more urban. The most significant changes were lake dessapeared in the north and the many trees cut down in the south side, these changes affected the environment negatively. In 1982, there was a lake in the northern wast, which was dessapeared to build to a furniture retail. Road was removed and many trees cut down to construct parking lot in the south. The lobby area at the entrance to shopping center was demolished and coffee shop was removed in the north side. As for the changes in east of the shopping center, electronic store and sport store were moved to the location of food store. A food store was moved to corner of shopping center. Trees in the east of center, which were cut down. Entertainment area in the middle of shopping center unchanged.
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that took place in the valley
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center in 1982 and in 2012.

Overall
over the 30-year period
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shopping
center became less rural and more urban. The most significant
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changes
were lake
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dessapeared
in the north and the
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trees
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cut
down in the south side, these
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affected
the environment
negatively
.

In 1982, there was a lake in the northern wast, which was
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dessapeared
to build to a furniture retail. Road
was removed
and
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many
trees
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cut
down to construct parking lot in the south. The lobby area at the entrance to
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center
was demolished
and coffee shop
was removed
in the north side.

As for the
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in east of the
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center, electronic
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store
and sport
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store
were
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moved
to the location of food
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store
. A food
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was
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moved
to corner of
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center. Trees in the east of center, which were
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cut
down. Entertainment area in the middle of
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center unchanged.
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IELTS academic the changes that took place in the valley shopping center in 1982 and in 2012.

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