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The line graph provides information about the number of visitors went to Caribbean island, which some them stayed in the island while other stayed on cruise ship from 2010 to 2017.

The line graph provides information about the number of visitors went to Caribbean island, which some them stayed in the island while other stayed on cruise ship from 2010 to 2017. qEx5
The line graph provides information about the number of visitors went to Caribbean island, which some them stayed in the island while other stayed on cruise ship from 2010 to 2017. Overall, the tourists of Caribbean island significantly increased with surpassed staying in the island or on the cruise ship over the given years. The net total of tourists increased sharply, in 2010 they started from 1 million visitor and grew markedly, but it were decline to nearly 2. 7 million in 2016. The tourist stayed on the island were remained stable at about 0. 7 million between 2010 and 2011, after that they grew to 1. 5 million, but with few fluctuation from 2015 to 2016 they are declined approximately to 1. 2 million and after that they escalated. Meanwhile the visitors on the cruise ship, they rose rapidly but they fell to 0. 2 by 2012 and then they went up. However, some of the tourists was likely to staying in the island they reached about 3. 5 million more than tourists staying on cruise ship with 2. 5 million in 2017.
The line graph provides information about the number of visitors went
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to Caribbean
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island
, which
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some
them stayed in the
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island
while other stayed on
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cruise
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ship
from 2010 to 2017.

Overall
, the
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tourists
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of Caribbean
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island
significantly
increased with surpassed staying in the
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island
or on the
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cruise
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ship
over the
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given
years.

The net total of
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tourists
increased
sharply
, in 2010 they
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started
from 1
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million
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visitor
and grew
markedly
,
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but
it were decline to
nearly
2. 7
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million
in 2016. The
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tourist
stayed on the
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island
were remained
stable at about 0. 7
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million
between 2010 and 2011, after that they grew to 1. 5
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million
,
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but
with
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few fluctuation
from 2015 to 2016 they
are declined
approximately to 1. 2
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million
and after that they escalated.

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Meanwhile
the visitors on the
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cruise
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ship
, they rose
rapidly
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but
they fell to 0. 2 by 2012 and then they went up.
However
,
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some of the
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tourists
was likely to staying in the
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island
they reached about 3. 5
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million
more than
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tourists
staying on
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cruise
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ship
with 2. 5
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million
in 2017.
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IELTS academic The line graph provides information about the number of visitors went to Caribbean island, which some them stayed in the island while other stayed on cruise ship from 2010 to 2017.

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184 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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