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The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. GBpw
The diagram depicts the information about the, how bricks are made and delivered to the building industry. Overall it can be seen that, there are seven main stages in the process, beginning with the excavation of clay and ending with the delivering stage. The first step in the process is to dig up clay from the ground with the help of the digger. Subsequently, the excavated clay is put on a grid made of metal and rolled using the roller. In the following stage, after sand and water is added, the mixture is then shaped into the forms of brick using either the mould or the wire cutter. Following the formation step, bricks are put into the oven and dried for one to two days. The process continues with the bricks being fired in the kiln at moderate temperature of 200 to 980 Celsius degree. After that, they are heated under the higher temperature of up to 1300 Celsius degree before being cooled for two or three days. In the next stage, bricks are packaged. The entire process concludes with the delivery of bricks to the customers.
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the,
how
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bricks
are made
and delivered to the building industry.
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it can be
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seen
that, there are seven main
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stages
in the
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process
, beginning with the excavation of clay and ending with the delivering
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stage
. The
first
step in the
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process
is to dig up clay from the ground with the
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help
of the digger.
Subsequently
, the excavated clay
is put
on a grid made of metal and rolled using the roller. In the following
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stage
, after sand and water is
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added
, the mixture is then shaped into the forms of
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brick
using either the
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mould
or the wire cutter. Following the formation step,
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bricks
are put
into the oven and dried for one to two days. The
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process
continues with the
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bricks
being fired
in the kiln at moderate temperature of 200 to 980 Celsius degree. After that, they
are heated
under the higher temperature of up to 1300 Celsius degree
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before
being cooled
for two or three days. In the
next
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stage
,
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bricks
are packaged
. The entire
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process
concludes with the delivery of
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bricks
to the customers.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

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