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The line graph illustrates UK acid rain emissions, measured, in millions of tonnes, from 4 various sectors between 1950 and 2007

The line graph illustrates UK acid rain emissions, measured, in millions of tonnes, from 4 various sectors between 1950 and 2007 D2lyj
Firstly, the amount of acid rain emissions by electricity and water decreased drammatically in UK. Three sectors showed a moderate decrease between 1991 and 2007. In 1990, other industries and transport and communication illustrated 0, 5 tonnes. These sectors did not change until 2001, just below and under 0, 5 tonnes. In 2007, other industries reduced steeply about 0, 3 tonnes. However, transport and communication rose slightly about 0, 8 tonnes. Meanwhile, starting with about 3, 5 tonnes of electricity, gas and water supply in 1997. This sector dipped steeply about 1, 3 tonnes. Between 2001and 2007, the amount gas and water supply, electricity falled slightly to 0, 5 respectively. However, domestic in UK declined gradually from 2tonnes to 1, 8 tonnes in 1997. In 1989 and 2007. Domestic's amount decreased modirately about 1, 3 tonnes, not an oscillations.
Firstly
, the amount of acid rain emissions by electricity and water decreased
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drammatically
in UK. Three sectors
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showed
a moderate decrease between 1991 and 2007. In 1990, other industries and transport and communication illustrated 0, 5 tonnes. These sectors did not
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change
until 2001,
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just
below and under 0, 5 tonnes. In 2007, other industries
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reduced
steeply
about 0, 3 tonnes.
However
, transport and communication rose
slightly
about 0, 8 tonnes. Meanwhile, starting with about 3, 5 tonnes of electricity, gas and water supply in 1997. This sector dipped
steeply
about 1, 3 tonnes. Between 2001and 2007, the amount gas and water supply, electricity
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falled
slightly
to 0, 5
respectively
.
However
, domestic in UK declined
gradually
from 2tonnes to 1, 8 tonnes in 1997. In 1989 and 2007. Domestic's amount decreased
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modirately
about 1, 3 tonnes, not
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an oscillations
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates UK acid rain emissions, measured, in millions of tonnes, from 4 various sectors between 1950 and 2007

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