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The line graph illustrates the unemployment ratios of rural and urban areas in Australia in 2012.

The line graph illustrates the unemployment ratios of rural and urban areas in Australia in 2012. E7nWb
The line graph illustrates the unemployment ratios of rural and urban areas in Australia in 2012. Overall, it is apparent that the employment rate was higher in the countrysides compared to cities. In addition, the end of 2012 witnessed the smallest difference between the unemployment percentages of rural and urban regions. At the start of 2012, a little over 2% of people living in the countryside were unemployed, while close to 6. 5% of Australian citizens residing in urban areas had no job, which was the highest figure in 2012. Until the middle of the second quarter, however, these figures came close to each other at a steady manner, having only 1% difference with 4% and 5%. Afterwards, the unemployment ratio of urban areas fluctuated around 5% until the end of 2012. By contrast, the rural areas followed a different trend, the number for which dropped to 2% in the third quarter before rebounding back to the same level as the second quarter. At the end of 2012, joblessness was around 4. 8% in the countryside, having only a 0. 2% difference from the figure for the urban areas.
The line graph illustrates the unemployment ratios of rural and
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in Australia in 2012.

Overall
, it is apparent that the employment rate was higher in the countrysides compared to cities.
In addition
, the
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end
of 2012 witnessed the smallest difference between the unemployment percentages of rural and
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regions.

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of 2012, a
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over 2% of
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living in the countryside
were unemployed
, while close to 6. 5% of Australian citizens residing in
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had no job, which was the highest figure in 2012. Until the middle of the second quarter,
however
, these figures came close to each other at a steady manner, having
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only
1% difference with 4% and 5%.

Afterwards, the unemployment ratio of
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urban
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fluctuated around 5% until the
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end
of 2012. By contrast, the rural
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followed a
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trend, the number for which dropped to 2% in the third quarter
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before
rebounding back to the same level as the second quarter. At the
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end
of 2012, joblessness was around 4. 8% in the countryside, having
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only
a 0. 2% difference from the figure for the
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urban
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.

IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the unemployment ratios of rural and urban areas in Australia in 2012.

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