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The line graph illustrates the number of short-term tourists in four different countries who visited Australia over a 25 years period from 1990, with data given in five-yearly increments.

The line graph illustrates the number of short-term tourists in four different countries who visited Australia over a 25 years period from 1990, with data given in five-yearly increments. Overall, it is obvious that there was an increase in the number of visitors from New Zealand, China, and the USA, while the opposite is true for Japan. To begin with, in 1990, nearly 500, 000 visitors in New Zealand came to Australia, and it went up gradually to 800, 000 in 2000, rising to 1, 100, 000 in 2005. After that, numbers rose to reach a peak of 1, 300, 000 in 2015. The same rising pattern can also be seen for that of China. They started low at about 100, 000 in 1990, then continued to grow to roughly 500, 000 in 2010. Interestingly, there was a dramatic increase in the number of China travelers, hitting the highest point at 1, 300, 000 in 2015. As for tourists from the USA, which went up gradually from 1990 to 2000 peak at 500, 000, then numbers fell and stayed constant at around 450 until the end of the period. In contrast, in terms of Japan, it peaked at around 800, 000 in 1997, then decreased steadily between 1990 and 2015. The number of visitors from Japan dropped to a low of about 300, 000 in 2011 and remained stable for most of the period.
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with, in 1990,
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rose to reach a peak of 1, 300, 000 in 2015. The same rising pattern can
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low at about 100, 000 in 1990, then continued to grow to roughly 500, 000 in 2010.
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of China travelers, hitting the highest point at 1, 300, 000 in 2015. As for tourists from the USA, which went up
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fell and stayed constant at around 450 until the
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of visitors from Japan dropped to a low of about 300, 000 in 2011 and remained stable for most of the period.
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the number of short-term tourists in four different countries who visited Australia over a 25 years period from 1990, with data given in five-yearly increments.

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