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The line graph illustrates the increasing ratio of housing price in three nations between 1998 and 2005. In general, the increasing rate in Britain had the most significant change, and the numbers in USA were relatively stable.

The line graph illustrates the increasing ratio of housing price in three nations between 1998 and 2005. In general, the increasing rate in Britain had the most significant change, and the numbers in USA were relatively stable. OVAVj
Looking at the data of the UK, it was the highest in 1998, about 14%; this figure dropped noticeably in next year to 9% and was exceeded by Australia by 2000. However, it reached the second highest number of 16% in 2001; after a dramatic decrease, the British housing prices grew more than a quarter in 2003 and the rate declined in the last 2 years to only 6% by 2005. Australia’s percentage of increasing housing price also underwent a remarkable fluctuation during the period. The figure never higher than 10% in the first 4 years, but it raised to approximately one-sixths in 2002 and then stayed platueaued until 2004; finally, the number plummet to about 1% at the end of the period. The percentages of USA grew steadily from 5% in 1998 to just under 10% in 2003. The figure reached a peak of 15% in 2004 but decreased slightly to 13% by 2005. To sum up, the housing prices in each country had raised during the given time span, and the prices in British real estate had increased the most of the three regions.
Looking at the data of the UK, it was the highest in 1998, about 14%; this figure dropped
noticeably
in
next
year to 9% and
was exceeded
by Australia by 2000.
However
, it reached the second highest number of 16% in 2001; after a dramatic decrease, the British housing
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prices
grew more than a quarter in 2003 and the rate declined in the last 2 years to
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only
6% by 2005.

Australia’s percentage of increasing housing
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price
also
underwent a remarkable fluctuation during the period. The figure never higher than 10% in the
first
4 years,
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but
it raised to approximately one-sixths in 2002 and then stayed
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platueaued
until 2004;
finally
, the number plummet to about 1% at the
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end
of the period.

The percentages
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of USA
grew
steadily
from 5% in 1998 to
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just
under 10% in 2003.
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The
figure reached a peak of 15% in 2004
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but
decreased
slightly
to 13% by 2005.

To sum up, the housing
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prices
in each country had raised during the
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given
time span, and the
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prices
in British real estate had increased the most of the three regions.
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the increasing ratio of housing price in three nations between 1998 and 2005. In general, the increasing rate in Britain had the most significant change, and the numbers in USA were relatively stable.

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