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The line graph illustrates the data related to variations of rates in three different type of crimes, in Manchester city centre between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates the data related to variations of rates in three different type of crimes, in Manchester city centre between 2003 and 2012. QDOw
Overall, the rate of burglary decreased significantly over the period, while car theft experienced an upward trend. However, the cases of robbery remained relatively stable throughout the time. Looking into the details of graph, in 2003 the rates of burglary and car theft were nearly 2300 and 3400 respectively. Cases of burglary declined sharply till 2008, reaching nearly 1100 (below car theft rate). During 2008-2009, it experienced a minor upward movement to more than 1400 and remained there till 2012. In the meantime, the ratio of car theft grew continuously throughout the period, reaching almost 2700 in 2012. In contrary, the cases of robbery were the lowest (almost 600) among these three crimes in 2003. The ratio of robbery stood at the same position in the end of the period, after undergoing a minor rise to around 900 and a fall to 500.
Overall
, the rate of burglary decreased
significantly
over the period, while
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car
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theft
experienced an upward trend.
However
, the cases of robbery remained
relatively
stable throughout the time. Looking into the
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details
of graph, in 2003 the rates of burglary and
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car
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theft
were
nearly
2300 and 3400
respectively
. Cases of burglary declined
sharply
till 2008, reaching
nearly
1100 (below
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car
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theft
rate). During 2008-2009, it experienced a minor upward movement to more than 1400 and remained there till 2012. In the meantime, the ratio of
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car
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theft
grew
continuously
throughout the period, reaching almost 2700 in 2012. In contrary, the cases of robbery were the lowest (almost 600) among these three crimes in 2003. The ratio of robbery stood at the same position in the
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end
of the period, after undergoing a minor rise to around 900 and a fall to 500.

IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the data related to variations of rates in three different type of crimes, in Manchester city centre between 2003 and 2012.

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