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The diagrams below show the stages in the erosion of a headland

The diagrams below show the stages in the erosion of a headland qO3a
The given diagrams show the 4 picture which the gradual eroded of the rock. Overall it can be clearly seen that there are 4 main stages in the process which contribute to the with drawl of the headland. To start with, the water comes and hits, and a fragment of the weakest part of the rock is eroded. Then a small hole turns into a big hole. Therefore, the water hits again and the rock base collapses. Besides, the influx of water had a profound effect on the headland. Consequently the rock is completely tumbled. Finally, the recovery and subsidence and impact of the water cause great damage to the rock. But the other side of the rock is not damaged at all. In general, a small hole is formed in a large rock due to the impact of the water, and as a result of the rock impact the cliff collapsed fully
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that there are 4 main stages in the process which contribute to the with drawl of the headland. To
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water
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comes
and hits, and a fragment of the weakest part of the
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rock
is eroded
. Then a
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small
hole turns into a
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big
hole.
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, the
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water
hits again and the
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rock
base collapses.
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, the influx of
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water
had a profound effect on the headland.
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Consequently
the
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rock
is completely tumbled.
Finally
, the recovery and subsidence and impact of the
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water
cause great damage to the
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rock
.
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the other side of the
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rock
is not damaged at all.
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, a
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small
hole
is formed
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rock
due to the impact of the
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, and
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impact the cliff collapsed
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IELTS academic The diagrams below show the stages in the erosion of a headland

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