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The line graph illustrates information about amount of money that spent on books among four European countries over a period of 10 years between 1995 and 2005

The line graph illustrates information about amount of money that spent on books among four European countries over a period of 10 years between 1995 and 2005 PRaBj
It is clear from the graph that all countries show upward trend. The most popular trend belongs to Germany while Italy had the lowest rate. If we look at the information in more details, as regards Germany, It started its investment at 80 million dollars, and this level rose steeply to 90 million dollars during first four year. Despite falling marginally to about 85 million dollars, the figure then rose in 2003. And reached the highest level of investing money on educational material in 2005. Italy's rate fluctuated between 50 and 55 million dollars from 1995 to 2001. Then there was a steadily rise in the level of money. During last four years over a period of the graph the amount of investment on books in France was nearly two times higher than Austria at 55 and 30 million dollars respectively in 1995. However in the last year of the time their rate of investments were the same just nearly 75 million dollars.
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upward trend. The most popular trend belongs to Germany while Italy had the lowest rate. If we look at the information in more
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, as regards Germany, It
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its investment at 80
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, and this level rose
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, the figure then rose in 2003. And reached the highest level of investing money on educational material in 2005. Italy's rate fluctuated between 50 and 55
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from 1995 to 2001. Then there was a
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in the level of money. During last four years over a period of the graph the amount of investment on books in France was
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two times higher than Austria at 55 and 30
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates information about amount of money that spent on books among four European countries over a period of 10 years between 1995 and 2005

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