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The line graph illustrates how the number of criminal cases by type of burglary, theft and robbery in the urban areas changed between 2003 to 2012.

The line graph illustrates how the number of criminal cases by type of burglary, theft and robbery in the urban areas changed between 2003 to 2012. DoDrk
The line graph illustrates how the number of criminal cases by type of burglary, theft and robbery in the urban areas changed between 2003 to 2012. Overall, the ratio of burglary just increased slightly and then decreased significantly, while the statistic of car theft and robbery remained stable with fluctuations. It can clearly be seen from the graph that the car theft decreased substantially from 2005 to 2006, after that it started to rise until 2012, when it reached to 2800 again. Besides that the robbery weren’t changed too much, it only fluctuates from 500 to 900 during the period. Although the rates of buglary was increased slightly to 3750 from the first year of the period, it had a dramatically decline from 3750 to 1400 in the remaining period. Finally, the rates of criminal was positively changed, all the statistic were down.
The line graph illustrates how the number of criminal cases by type of burglary, theft and robbery in the urban areas
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changed
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between 2003 to 2012
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Overall
, the ratio of burglary
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just
increased
slightly
and then decreased
significantly
, while the statistic of car theft and robbery remained stable with fluctuations. It can
clearly
be
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seen
from the graph that the car theft decreased
substantially
from 2005 to 2006, after that it
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started
to rise until 2012, when it reached to 2800 again.
Besides
that the robbery weren’t
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changed
too much, it
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only
fluctuates from 500 to 900 during the period. Although the rates of
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buglary
was increased
slightly
to 3750 from the
first
year of the period, it had a
You used an adverb ('dramatically') instead of an adjective, or a noun ('decline') instead of another adjective.
dramatically decline
from 3750 to 1400 in the remaining period.
Finally
, the rates of criminal was
positively
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changed
, all the statistic were down.
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates how the number of criminal cases by type of burglary, theft and robbery in the urban areas changed between 2003 to 2012.

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