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The table from writing task 1

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The table illustrates data and anticipation about the amount of the population of elder people at the age of 65 years old and above in Canada, Germany, and the UK in 1988, 2000, and 2030. Overall, the table shows that the rate of the population aged 65 and above in all of these three countries is growing in the given period. The highest percentage of these old people belongs to Germany while the UK will have the lowest rate. Between 1988 and 2000, the population of elderly people in Germany and Canada went up by around 5 percent to 25. 32% and 20. 67% respectively. On the other hand, the UK faced relatively little change in the proportion of aged 65 plus and remained as just under 15%. In 2030 it is predicted that the percentage of the population of all these countries will go up approximately 5. 5%. The percentage is forecasted to reach 26. 35% in Canada, 30. 42% in Germany, and 20. 35% in the UK.
The table illustrates data and anticipation about the amount of the
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population
of elder
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people
at the age of 65 years
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old
and above in Canada, Germany, and the UK in 1988, 2000, and 2030.

Overall
, the table
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shows
that the rate of the
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population
aged 65 and above in all of these three countries is growing in the
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given
period. The highest percentage of these
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old
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people
belongs to Germany while the UK will have the lowest rate.

Between 1988 and 2000, the
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population
of elderly
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people
in Germany and Canada went up by around 5 percent to 25. 32% and 20. 67%
respectively
.
On the other hand
, the UK faced
relatively
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little
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change
in the proportion of aged 65 plus and remained as
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just
under 15%.

In
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2030 it
is predicted
that the percentage of the
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population
of all these countries will go up approximately 5. 5%. The percentage
is forecasted
to reach 26. 35% in Canada, 30. 42% in Germany, and 20. 35% in the UK.
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IELTS academic The table from writing task 1

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
169 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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