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The line graph gives the detail regarding the proportion of people of different age groups rating on certain factor as there importance when they move to a new home.

The line graph gives the detail regarding the proportion of people of different age groups rating on certain factor as there importance when they move to a new home. N3bXW
The line graph gives the detail regarding the proportion of people of different age groups rating on certain factor as there importance when they move to a new home. A preliminary investigation of the line graph reveals that crime rate is the most important factor for people of all age groups. At the beginning of the period crime rate stands at about 80 per cent of people between the age of 25 to 34 age group, which was far higher than other factor and there is a gradual incline of population of 54 to 64 age groups. similarly, the school experience a downward trend, starting the age groups at above 50% and finishing below one fourth of people. Moreover, shopping facilities account for about 15 per cent of people of 25 to 34 age groups, and the proportion of 55 to 64 age groups people increse significantly by 10 per cent. on the other hand, public transport and parks are less preference factor in all age groups, with representing less than one fourth of people.
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IELTS academic The line graph gives the detail regarding the proportion of people of different age groups rating on certain factor as there importance when they move to a new home.

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