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The line graph gives information about the percentage of people at the age of 65 and over in three different parts of the world over a century, from 1940 to 2040.

The line graph gives information about the percentage of people at the age of 65 and over in three different parts of the world over a century, from 1940 to 2040. L9JXr
The line graph gives information about the percentage of people at the age of 65 and over in three different parts of the world over a century, from 1940 to 2040. Overall, it is clear that there is an upward tend in all countries. However, as opposed to the rest of the period, the biggest change is expected in the 2030s. As for elderly people in the USA and Sweden, these two countries showed a similar pattern. After starting at under 10% at the beginning of the period, the figures for USA and Sweden had experienced a significant increase to a sharp 15% and under 15% respectively by 1980. At this point, however, while the proportion of old people in the USA stayed almost unchanged until 2020, that of Sweden rose sharply to 20%. By the end of the period, both of these countries will see a sudden rise to around 25%. In contrast, the figure for Japanese elderly people accounted for 5% at the start of the period, followed by a slight drop to about 3% between 1940 and 1960. The proportion remained constant by 1990s but then it is predicted to show a gradual but significant growth to 10% by 2030s. Until the end of the period, this percentage is expected to increase dramatically to well over 25%, which is the highest of all.
The line graph gives information about the percentage of
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at the age of 65 and over in three
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parts of the world over a century, from 1940 to 2040.

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that there is an upward tend in all countries.
However
, as opposed to the rest of the
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period
, the biggest
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change
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in the 2030s.

As for elderly
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in the USA and Sweden, these two countries
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a similar pattern. After starting at under 10% at the beginning of the
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period
, the figures
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and Sweden had experienced a significant increase to a sharp 15% and under 15%
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, while the proportion of
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old
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people
in the USA stayed almost unchanged until 2020, that of Sweden rose
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end
of the
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, both of these countries will
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a sudden rise to around 25%.

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, the figure for Japanese elderly
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people
accounted for 5% at the
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start
of the
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, followed by a slight drop to about 3% between 1940 and 1960. The proportion remained constant by 1990s
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then it
is predicted
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a gradual
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significant growth to 10% by 2030s. Until the
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of the
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, this percentage is
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to increase
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to well over 25%, which is the highest of all.
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IELTS academic The line graph gives information about the percentage of people at the age of 65 and over in three different parts of the world over a century, from 1940 to 2040.

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