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The bar graph show the number of trips made by student using different type of transport to travel from school between 1990 and 2010

The bar graph show the number of trips made by student using different type of transport to travel from school between 1990 and 2010 3LDmm
The given bar graph depict information about the number of trips made by students using different type of transport to travel from school namely car, walking, cycling, bus amd walking, bus in one country between1990 and 2010. Overall, its is crystal clear that, bus and car was most preference mode of transport by children. while, the least number of children used cycling modes of transport. To begin with, in 1990 the number of car trips made by children was 4 million per year. while, there was a rapid increase in 201 to approximately 12 million per year. however, 6 million of student used walking and cycling mode of transport in 1990. There was a significant decline in 2010 at around3 million and 2 million respectively. Further more, 7 million of children preferred bus and walking to travel from school in 1990. whereas, there was a slight decline in 2010 to nearly 5 million. In contrast, the number of bus trips made by children was 12 million per year in 1990. While, there was a sudden fall in 2010 at around 6 million.
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to travel from school
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car, walking, cycling, bus
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walking, bus in one country between1990 and 2010.
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that, bus and car was most preference mode of
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transport
by
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children
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while
, the least
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number
of
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children
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used
cycling modes of
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transport
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with, in 1990 the
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number
of car trips made by
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was 4
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per year.
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while
, there was a rapid increase in 201 to approximately 12
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million
per year.
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, 6
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million
of student
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used
walking and cycling mode of
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transport
in 1990. There was a significant decline in 2010 at around3
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and 2
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respectively
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of
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preferred bus and walking to travel from school in 1990.
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million
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was 12
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million
per year in 1990.
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