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The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. wYwE
The line graph gives information about how many international students from three different countries (Iran, Greece, and Turkey) who studied at Sheffield University from 2005 to 2009. Overall, the trend was different between the number of Greece’s students that declined significantly, while the figure of students from Iran and Turkey was rose steadily during the period given. In 2005, there were around 180 students from Greece that enrolled in the University, the highest compared to the two other countries in that year. However, it fell to around 70 students in 2007. The number remained steady by 2008 but it slumped dropped to approximately 50 students in 2009, the lowest among others in the particular year. On the other hand, the University’s international students from Iran were only about 40 in 2005. Then, it rose steeply to 70 students in 2007. After that, there was a major growth in the figure to reach about 160 students in 2009, the highest compared to others. Meanwhile, Turkey students who attended class in the university in 2005 were only around 20, the lowest compared to other countries. Nevertheless, it jumped to around 90 students in 2007 and increased steadily to more than 120 students in 2009, just 40 students less than Iran.
The line graph gives information about how
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students
from three
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countries (Iran, Greece, and Turkey) who studied at Sheffield
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University
from 2005 to 2009.
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, the trend was
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different
between the number of Greece’s
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students
that declined
significantly
, while the figure of
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students
from Iran and Turkey was rose
steadily
during the period
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.

In 2005, there were
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around
180
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students
from Greece that enrolled in the
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University
, the highest compared to the two
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other
countries in that year.
However
, it fell to
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around
70
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students
in 2007. The number remained steady by 2008
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it slumped dropped to approximately 50
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students
in 2009, the lowest among others in the particular year.

On the
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hand, the
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University’s
international
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students
from Iran were
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about 40 in 2005. Then, it rose
steeply
to 70
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students
in 2007. After that, there was a major growth in the figure to reach about 160
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students
in 2009, the highest compared to others. Meanwhile, Turkey
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students
who attended
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in the
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university
in 2005 were
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around
20, the lowest compared to
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other
countries.
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, it jumped to
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around
90
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students
in 2007 and increased
steadily
to more than 120
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students
in 2009,
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40
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less than Iran.

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