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The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. wDxd
The line graph provides the information about pupils who enrolled of sheffied university in three various countries: Iranian, Greek, Turkish. In the year 2005 untill 2009. Overall, the highest number of students enrolled in Iran, while Greek registered in university the lowest one. To begin with, in the year 2005, Greek enrollees were actually the most at the beginning of the period at approximately 180. Then this number was decreased after one year at 139 number. In the year 2007 to 2008 this number was table. Number dropped of 15 number. And Turki was started 20 number of students then this crap was gradually increase and of the year 2009 at 121. Apart from that, in 2005, the number of students from Iran stood at 40 students. The figure then gradually Grew to little more than 80 students in 2008. In 2009, it soared and reached it is peak at 160 students.
The line graph provides the information about pupils who enrolled of
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university in three various countries: Iranian, Greek, Turkish. In the
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2005
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untill
2009.

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, the highest
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of
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enrolled in Iran, while Greek registered in university the lowest one.

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2005, Greek
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were actually the most at the beginning of the period at approximately 180. Then this
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was decreased
after one
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at 139
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. In the
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2007 to 2008 this
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was table.
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dropped of 15
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. And
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Turki
was
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started
20
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of
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students
then this crap was
gradually
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and of the
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2009 at 121.

Apart from that, in 2005, the
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of
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students
from Iran stood at 40
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students
. The figure then
gradually
Grew to
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more than 80
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in 2008. In 2009, it soared and reached it is peak at 160
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IELTS academic The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

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