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The line graph give information about amount of spread consumers from 1981 to 2007.

The line graph give information about amount of spread consumers from 1981 to 2007. rpjl
The line graph illustrates different amounts of spread consumed between 1981 and 2007. The information is measured in grams. Overall, it is clear data there was a significant decrease in the consumption of butter and margarines and an increase in the consumption of low fat and spreads was also noticed. Butter was the most popular spread at the beginning of the period and its consumption reached a peak of 160 grams per person per week in 1986. After this, , there was s sharply decline between 1986 and 2007. Low fat spread wre introduced in 1996, they saw as a sharlpy rise in the consumption to 80 grams from 1996 to 2001 then it is a slightly fall to 70 grams per person per week in 2007. The consumption of margarines was consumed at 90 grams at the beginning of the period and the it is a significantly declined till 1986. After some fluctuations between 1986 and 1996 the figures is again a constantly drop.
The line graph illustrates
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amounts of
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spread
consumed between 1981 and 2007. The information
is measured
in
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grams
.
Overall
, it is
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clear
data there was a significant decrease in the
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consumption
of butter and
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margarines
and an increase in the
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consumption
of low
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fat
and
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spreads
was
also
noticed. Butter was the most popular
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spread
at the beginning of the period and its
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consumption
reached a peak of 160
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grams
per person per week in 1986. After this,
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,
there was s
sharply
decline between 1986 and 2007. Low
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fat
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spread
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wre
introduced in 1996, they
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saw
as a
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sharlpy
rise in the
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consumption
to 80
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grams
from 1996 to 2001 then it is a
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slightly fall
to 70
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grams
per person per week in 2007. The
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consumption
of
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margarines
was consumed
at 90
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grams
at the beginning of the period and
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the it
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declined till 1986. After
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some
fluctuations between 1986 and 1996 the figures is again a
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constantly drop
.
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