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The line graph displays the proportion of test outcomes in England and London from 2001 to 2006.

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The line graph displays the proportion of test outcomes in England and London from 2001 to 2006. Overall, London experienced a constant surge throughout the period whereas England oscillated briefy then later witnessed a gradual soar. To begin with, in the year 2001, London was ranked second after an approximated 46% pass with only 2% difference. Two years later, the fgures increased minimally to around 51%. Thereafter, the displayed figures maintained an upward trajectory throughout the remaining years and emerging victorious ahead of England with nearly 58% in 2006. In contrast, England commenced the year with almost 47% success rate ahead of Londonn The proportion grew gently to around 51% excellence after two years. However, between 2003 and 2004, England’s academic performance nearly fatened out with almost 52%. Nevertheless, a steady rise was seen during the last two years and unfortunately finishing second with just a percentage gap behind London.
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outcomes in England and London from 2001 to 2006.

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then later witnessed a gradual soar.

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2001, London
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second after an approximated 46% pass with
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only
2% difference. Two years later, the
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increased
minimally
to around 51%. Thereafter, the displayed figures maintained an upward trajectory throughout the remaining years and emerging victorious ahead of England with
nearly
58% in 2006.

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, England commenced the
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with almost 47% success rate ahead of
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Londonn
The proportion grew
gently
to around 51% excellence after two years.
However
, between 2003 and 2004, England’s academic performance
nearly
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fatened
out with almost 52%.
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, a steady rise was
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during the last two years and unfortunately finishing second with
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a percentage gap behind London.
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