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the two maps below show the changes in the city hospital between the years of 2007 to 2010

the two maps below show the changes in the city hospital between the years of 2007 to 2010 keJJN
The given two maps illustrate the main changes which took place in city hospital during the period of 2007 to 2010. Overall, it is evident that basic changes belong to the building of car parks and bus stations including some changes in reconstruction of roads. Looking to the detailed model of city hospital in 2007, it is obvious that there were 6 small bus stations along the hospital road, however they have been knocked down and there has been built one enormous station. This station connected to two roundabouts that have been added to the construction of building. Another significant change is that there has been opened up new public car park to the east of hospital. In 2007 there was staff and public car park and as we can see it is still in the function of car park, but only belongs to the staff of the city hospital.
The
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two maps illustrate the main
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changes
which took place in city
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hospital
during the period of 2007 to 2010.

Overall
, it is evident that basic
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changes
belong to the building of
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car
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parks
and bus
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stations
including
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some
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changes
in reconstruction of roads.

Looking to the detailed model of city
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hospital
in 2007, it is obvious that there were 6
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small
bus
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stations
along the
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hospital
road,
however
they have
been knocked
down and there has
been built
one enormous
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station
. This
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station
connected to two roundabouts that have been
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added
to the construction of building.

Another significant
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change
is that there has
been opened
up new public
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car
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park
to the east of
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hospital
. In 2007 there was staff and public
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car
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park
and as we can
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see
it is
still
in the function of
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car
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park
,
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but
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only
belongs to the staff of the city
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hospital
.

IELTS academic the two maps below show the changes in the city hospital between the years of 2007 to 2010

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6.0
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