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The line graph demonstrates the numbers of arrivals to and from the United Kingdoms measured in million, while the bar chart displays country that is the most prevalent to travel by inhabitants in England.

The line graph demonstrates the numbers of arrivals to and from the United Kingdoms measured in million, while the bar chart displays country that is the most prevalent to travel by inhabitants in England. gG5Ea
The line graph demonstrates the numbers of arrivals to and from the United Kingdoms measured in million, while the bar chart displays country that is the most prevalent to travel by inhabitants in England. Overall, in the first graph, both the numbers of tourists visited the Great Britain and the times that people in this country traveled oversea experienced an upward trend. Nonetheless, most of Englishmen liked coming to France, while Turkey was the least popular destination. At the first time of the period, both of the in and out trips accounted for a very poor proportion. About 13 millions of abroad holidays was taken by English people and only 10 millions people chose England for vacation. But in the 1980s, they rose significantly. For example, in 1989, it reach over 30 millions, triple times as large as in 1979. Next, the two lines continued climbing up until the end and peaked at approximately 50 millions for the upper one and nearly 30 for the lower one in 1999. By far the most popular countries to visit in 1999 were France around 11 million visitors, followed by Spain at 9 million. The USA, Greece, and Turkey were far less popular at around 4, 3 and 2 million visitors respectively.
The line graph demonstrates the numbers of arrivals to and from the United Kingdoms measured in
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million
, while the bar chart displays country
that is
the most prevalent to travel by inhabitants in England.

Overall
, in the
first
graph, both the numbers of tourists visited the Great Britain and the times that
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people
in this country traveled oversea experienced an upward trend. Nonetheless,
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most of Englishmen
liked coming to France, while Turkey was the least popular destination.

At the
first
time of the period, both of the in and out trips accounted for a
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very
poor proportion. About 13
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millions
of abroad holidays
was taken
by English
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people
and
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only
10
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millions
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people
chose England for vacation.
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But
in the 1980s, they rose
significantly
.
For example
, in 1989, it
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reach
over 30
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millions
, triple times as large as in 1979.
Next
, the two lines continued climbing up until the
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end
and peaked at approximately 50
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millions
for the upper one and
nearly
30 for the lower one in 1999.

By far the most popular countries to visit in 1999 were France around 11
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million
visitors, followed by Spain at 9
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million
. The USA, Greece, and Turkey were far less popular at around 4, 3 and 2
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million
visitors
respectively
.
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