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The line graph compares the unemployment rates in two countries the US and Japan in March in seven consecutive years starting from 1993.

The line graph compares the unemployment rates in two countries the US and Japan in March in seven consecutive years starting from 1993. 6aab3
The line graph compares the unemployment rates in two countries the US and Japan in March in seven consecutive years starting from 1993. Overall, the figure for the two countries stood at different levels in the first year but reached at the same in the last year of the period in question. In the first year, the figure for the workless rate in the US stood at around 7%, which was almost triple the proportion of Japan. The US figure fluctuated slightly in the next three years, which dropped to 5. 3% in March 1996, whereas the figure for Japan rose dramatically to hit a peak at 4. 4% and hence the gap between the US and Japan had narrowed. The percentage of the US and Japan both fluctuated, an opposite trend can be observed in the two countries. In March 1998, the proportion of unemployment rates in the US and Japan were matched at 5. 3%, after which the figure for the US reach a low of 4. 8% before rosing over 5% in the last year, which was the same level with Japan
The line graph compares the unemployment rates in two countries the US and
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in March in seven consecutive years starting from 1993.
Overall
, the
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for the two countries stood at
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different
levels in the
first
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year
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but
reached at the same in the last
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year
of the period in question.

In the
first
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, the
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for the
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workless
rate in the US stood at around 7%, which was almost triple the proportion of
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Japan
. The US
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fluctuated
slightly
in the
next
three years, which dropped to 5. 3% in March 1996, whereas the
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figure
for
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Japan
rose
dramatically
to hit a peak at 4. 4% and
hence
the gap between the US and
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Japan
had narrowed.

The percentage of the US and
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Japan
both fluctuated, an opposite trend can
be observed
in the two countries. In March 1998, the proportion of unemployment rates in the US and
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Japan
were matched
at 5. 3%, after which the
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figure
for the US reach a low of 4. 8%
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before
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rosing
over 5% in the last
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year
, which was the same level with
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Japan
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IELTS academic The line graph compares the unemployment rates in two countries the US and Japan in March in seven consecutive years starting from 1993.

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