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The given bar chart illustrates the changes in the places in the places where individuals used to surf the internet between 1998 and 2004.

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The given bar chart illustrates the changes in the places in the places where individuals used to surf the internet between 1998 and 2004. Overall, it is clear seen that the maximum people surfed the internet from home. While, the minimum surfed the net from the library. Moving to detail, the percentage of masses who accessed the internet from home fell to approximately 55 in 1998 to 48 in 2000. After the proportion was rise in 2 percent from 2002 and 5 percent in 2004. Moreover, In 1998 work field surfed the modern technology by only 27 %. In the next year was also remained static. But, 2004 was significantly dropped by 15 percent. Probing further, the pencentum of human being who used an gadgets to study at college was 20% in the both year. However, inclined the quarter in 2002 as well as, 15 percent in year 2004. Whilst, the library purpose used net was 11% in 1998. Then, gone up nearly 17 percent. The further period, was level off about 14 %.
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bar chart illustrates the
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changes
in the places in the places where individuals
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used
to surf the internet between 1998 and 2004.
Overall
, it is
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clear
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seen
that the maximum
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people
surfed the internet from home.
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While
, the minimum surfed the net from the library. Moving to detail, the percentage of masses who accessed the internet from home fell to approximately 55 in 1998 to 48 in 2000. After the proportion was rise in 2
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percent
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from 2002 and 5
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percent
in 2004.
Moreover
, In 1998 work field surfed the modern technology by
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only
27 %. In the
next
year was
also
remained static.
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But
, 2004 was
significantly
dropped by 15
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percent
. Probing
further
, the
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pencentum
of human being who
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used
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an gadgets
to study at college was 20% in the both year.
However
, inclined the quarter in 2002
as well
as, 15
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percent
in year 2004. Whilst, the library purpose
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used
net was 11% in 1998. Then, gone up
nearly
17
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percent
. The
further
period, was level off about 14 %.
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IELTS academic The given bar chart illustrates the changes in the places in the places where individuals used to surf the internet between 1998 and 2004.

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5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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