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The line graph compares the unemployment rate in urban and rural areas of Australia in 2012 divided into four quarters. Units measured in terms of percentage.

The line graph compares the unemployment rate in urban and rural areas of Australia in 2012 divided into four quarters. Units measured in terms of percentage. 7J6Ok
Overall, the unemployment rate in the rural areas has slightly decreased over the quarter. But comparatively higher than urban areas. while employments in urban years have received ups and downs throughout the year. By the end of the year rate of unemployment in both rural and urban are almost identical. As can be seen, in the urban areas at the beginning of the year it was about 2 percent then reached the peak at 4 percent in the span of 6 months. Before drastically dropping to 2 percent in the third quarter. later on, it was fluctuating between the third and fourth quarter and then rose to around 4percent. On the other hand, rural areas only started at about 2percent this figure then declined slowly in the second quarter. The unemployment rate then rose a little in the third quarter and remained stable throughout the last quarter.
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, the unemployment rate in the rural
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employments in
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years have received ups and downs throughout the
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. By the
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rate of unemployment in both rural and
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are almost identical.

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at the beginning of the
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it was about 2
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then reached the peak at 4
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in the span of 6 months.
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in the third
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and then rose to around 4percent.

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this figure then declined
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. The unemployment rate then rose a
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in the third
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and remained stable throughout the last
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IELTS academic The line graph compares the unemployment rate in urban and rural areas of Australia in 2012 divided into four quarters. Units measured in terms of percentage.

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