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The line graph compares the percentage of people who used the Internet in three countries –the USA, Canada and Mexico, between 1999 and 2009, a ten-year period.

The line graph compares the percentage of people who used the Internet in three countries –the USA, Canada and Mexico, between 1999 and 2009, a ten-year period. KwWBk
The line graph compares the percentage of people who used the Internet in three countries –the USA, Canada and Mexico, between 1999 and 2009, a ten-year period. Overall, Mexico had the lowest proportion of internet users in its population, while Canada experienced the fastest growth in internet usage. It is also noticeable the proportion of people who use the internet in each country increased throughout the period shown. In 1999, the proportion of people who used the Internet was highest in the USA at around 20%. This figure was significantly higher than those of Mexico and Canada, in which levels of internet users stood at 10% and 5% respectively. In 2005, Internet usage in both the USA and Canada rose to around 70% of the population, while the figure for Mexico reached just over 25%. By 2009, almost 100% of Canadians were using the Internet, the greatest figure for that year followed by the USA at 80%. Mexicos’ figure was the lowest with less than half of the population using the Internet. Missing feature - In 2002 Canada overtakes America and stay above until the rest of the period
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the internet in each country increased throughout the period shown.

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the Internet was highest in the USA at around 20%. This
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higher than those of Mexico and Canada, in which levels of internet users stood at 10% and 5%
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. In 2005, Internet usage in both the USA and Canada rose to around 70% of the population, while the
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for Mexico reached
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over 25%.

By 2009, almost 100% of Canadians were using the Internet, the greatest
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for that year followed by the USA at 80%.
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was the lowest with less than half of the population using the Internet.

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In 2002 Canada overtakes America and stay above until the rest of the period

IELTS academic The line graph compares the percentage of people who used the Internet in three countries –the USA, Canada and Mexico, between 1999 and 2009, a ten-year period.

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