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The line graph below shows the number of cell phone subscribers in a particular city, by gender.

The line graph below shows the number of cell phone subscribers in a particular city, by gender. LkJ6
The line graph gives information about the mobile phone subscribers in certain area by men and women in maryvilla between the year 1995 and 2015. Overall, it can be clearly seen from the graph that the average numbers of boys was relatively higher throughtout the period compare to the girls which was around 2700 subscribers in comparison to girls (2300) who subscribe the cell phone. First of all, the number of men were highest in using a cell phone then that of women. In the year 1995, the boys who subscribe the mobile phone were just 500 peoples but in 2025 it rose conyinuously and reached 2500 viewers. However, in the year between 2005 to 2010 it remains unchanged in comparison to women. Likewise, girls viewers were decline and reached 2200 peoples in 2015. Secondly, in context of women there was a significant decline were made iin the year 2005 to 2015 which was 2200 people in the final year compare to men. Lastly it can be seen that, the number of men were more in subscribing the cell phone in maryville.
The line graph gives information about the mobile
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subscribers in certain area by
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men
and
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women
in
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maryvilla
between the
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year
1995 and 2015.
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, it can be
clearly
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seen
from the graph that the average numbers of boys was
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throughtout
the period compare to the girls which was around 2700 subscribers
in comparison
to girls (2300) who subscribe the cell
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phone
.
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First of all
, the number of
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men
were highest in using a cell
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phone
then that of
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women
. In the
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year
1995, the boys who subscribe the mobile
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phone
were
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just
500 peoples
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in 2025 it rose
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conyinuously
and reached 2500 viewers.
However
, in the
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between 2005 to 2010
it remains unchanged
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women
.
Likewise
, girls viewers were decline and reached 2200 peoples in 2015.
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, in context of
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women
there was a significant decline
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iin
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2005 to 2015 which was 2200
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in the final
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compare to
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seen
that, the number of
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were more in subscribing the cell
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in
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maryville
.
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the number of cell phone subscribers in a particular city, by gender.

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