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The two bar charts provide education data of 10 different countries, for the children aged 15 years in 2015.

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The two bar charts provide education data of 10 different countries, for the children aged 15 years in 2015. The first chart illustrated the highest time spent per week (in hours) on homework by 10 different nations, while the second bar chart depicts the top ten countries securing the highest marks in the International Science test. Overall, there appears to be a correlation between the two countries where the children spend less time on homework and the highest marks obtained. Looking specifically at the first chart, the highest time of 8. 5 hours was spent by the students of Italy, and Ireland followed the next where the children gave 7. 2 hours per week on homework. Regarding the next six countries, a similar amount of hours spent on the homework was recorded which ranged from 4. 5 hours in Japan to 6. 5 hours in the United States. On the contrary, the same age group students of Finland and South Korea spent the lowest time of about 2. 8 hours and 2. 9 hours respectively. In terms of the Top Science score, Finland was able to secure the highest of 568 points, although the children of that country spent the lowest hours on homework. Furthermore, the second-highest score was 548 for Hongkong, and the next 6 countries had a similar score at about 530 points. Moreover, the last country that made the top ten list was the United States, which obtained a score of 516. Interestingly, the countries as Italy and Ireland where the students devoted a higher number of hours to doing homework didn’t even make the list.
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IELTS academic The two bar charts provide education data of 10 different countries, for the children aged 15 years in 2015.

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